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托福写作五种结构类错误总结

2018-04-01 12:10:00来源:网络

  托福写作五种结构类错误总结!在托福作文中,结构是文章的框架,结构是否合理,对整个的作文也有着重要的影响。通过对往期考生的写作分析,下面汇总了托福写作中最常见的五种错误的作文结构。更多精彩尽请关注新东方在线托福网(http://toefl.koolearn.com)!

  1.因果类文章放弃因果关系跑题

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the loss of old friends.

  这个题目有的同学的解答是disagree,她的理由是搬家的各种好处,From my point of view, it is quite beneficial for people to move from place to place for a variety of reasons like broadening our horizons and take risks etc.但是却忘了和文章中的原因friends联系起来,导致跑题。

  2.对比类话题没有对比

  Do you agree or disagree: The telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television?

  通常这类话题看起来很简单,其实却最容易诱导人进入一个忘我又忘题的境界。很多童鞋看到这类话题,马上脑子里就开始转了,如果是支持telephone,就想到很多telephone的好处;如果是television,就准备开始褒奖television。

  但是他们却忽略了一个问题,就是greater influence中这个比较级意味着作者在表扬一方的同时要说明为什么这一方的优点另一方缺乏。如果不能说明的话,单纯地说一方好,并不能证明另一方不好啊。你们说是不是?

  所以说,比较类话题千万别忘了比较!!!针对这道题写一写我的思路:

  1. Television can transfer information more efficiently and effectively than telephone does.

  2. The information on television is relatively closer to truth.

  3. Television plays a valuable role in reuniting family members in a unique way, which cannot be provided by telephone.

  我这三个论点并不一定完善准确,但是起码表明看懂了题目,力图找出可供对比的证据!当然,也不一定是每段开头都这么严格地表明对比的立场,但是字里行间起码要告诉人家,恩,你有在对比!

  3.文章段落内部过长,例子过于赘述

  我们说思路要清晰简洁有条理,也就是要避免一个段落内部叙述过多的内容,尤为需要注意的就是,有些童鞋一写例子就收不住手!感觉例子贴近生活,很好写,就一直写!这是大家需要克服的!虽然你想写,但是人家未必感兴趣,你只要把大致的内容用两三句话表达一下即可,给人一个直观的概念比反反复复赘述要好得多!比如以下的例子就太长了。

  (典型反例,引以为戒)When taking economy into consideration, people will find it there is no doubt that well-paid jobs are the better choice than another, because a well-paid job can satisfy people's need. The case of my friend David, who has a well-paid job can serve as a good example for my statement. He had been to a little company after he finished his college's study. This company only can give him little wages but there are no people compete him in work and he need not to worry about he will lose his job because this company cannot attract more employers. In the first, he thought he will relax when he works and it is true. Unfortunately, when a new kind of computer is put into the market and he wanted to get it, he found his wages cannot support it. And then his changed a job which can give him a well-paid but not safety. Finally, he can buy everything he likes.

  4 段落中心句没有起到总结全段的作用

  我们通常把段落第一句作为中心句,因而这个中心句的作用也是很重要的。因此在写中心句的时候要想清楚你这一段要表达什么再写!不要写空话大话、没有意义的话。否则,你的中心句就没有办法得到段落内部例子的支持和论证。

  同学们可以看看下面这个例子,长长不知所云:

  (典型反例,引以为戒)When you are full of sorrow, the one accompanies with you and enlighten you is always your old friends because they know you intimately. If you keep your old friends while making new friends, you cannot keep the balance of two sides. Please imagine that there is always someone that you do not understand more with each other and when you know more about these friends, you will make new friends and then face a stranger again. It is too strange and ridiculous. So I deem that keeping old friends and prolonging the friendship will present more convenience and familiarity.

  为了克服这个错误,我给大家的建议呢就是:先写个大概的中心句,等把整段写完之后再回过头来看一看你的中心句是否起到了中心的作用,如果没有,那就尽量让它detailed到可以涵盖段落内部的内容!!

  5.头重脚轻

  一般犯这种错误的作者,都是在下笔之时没有构思好,于是出现了越写越少,前期用力过猛,后期后劲不足的现象。其实,如果不是过于明显的话,这种错误是不会引起考官注意的~这里我写出这种错误主要是希望大家在写作文时能够较好地平衡各段落之间的关系,不要有话写的时候就疯狂写,没话说的时候就可怜巴巴。

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