课程咨询

托福考试网 托福资料下载 托福资讯 0元讲座 水平测试

托福考试练习
新东方在线 > TOEFL > 托福写作 > 正文
托福培训

扫码免费领资料

内含托福全科备考资料

更有免费水平测试及备考规划

托福培训

扫码关注掌握一手留学资讯

回复XDF免费水平测试

录播精讲 直播课HOT

托福独立写作开篇技巧

2018-09-03 15:30:57来源：网络

　　托福写作考试中，开篇是非常重要的，如何能够在短时间内写出精彩的开头，为我们的写作拿到高分呢?新东方在线托福网为大家整理了相关的技巧，供大家参考学习。

　　这两大步骤细化起来可以概括为四句话：第一句，采用同义替换的方式对原题目的意思进行更改，当然是“形变神不变”;第二句，对题目的意思进行解释;第三句，提出自己的观点;第四句，概括自己所提出观点的理由，引起下文。

　　根据大家对托福独立写的练习情况，可以总结了一些常犯的毛病题目来解释这个“两大步，四个句子”的具体运用方法。

　　案例1：误解原意思

　　Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things,they can do few things well?

　　Original：

　　Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period.Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement.

　　Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.

　　解析：

　　文章第一句话不是对原题目意思进行解释，而是采用采取了和原意思相反的做法来进行题目诠释;第二句表明自己对误解题目的观点;第三句话对自己的观点进行近一步的解释;第四句一个过渡性的句子。开篇内容安排倒是很好，但是作者犯了误解原题目意思的错误导致后面整个文字都做了无用功。

　　改后：

　　When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously,they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly.Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time.

　　Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors.

　　Therefore,I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done.The reasons are as follow.

　　Revised：

　　第一句话对原题目意思进行了很好的诠释;第二、三句话进一步解释原题目;第四句话提出自己的观点;第五句话过渡性句子引起下文。

　　案例2 ：语言罗嗦，绕弯子给出自己观点，浪费时间

　　Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.

　　Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

　　original：

　　With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child.

　　So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.

　　解析：

　　这个开头看似没有任何问题，但是仔细分析就会发现很多问题。首先，作者绕了个大弯才给出自己的观点。其次，观点是对原题目的抄写，改动的比较少。最后，开篇缺少引起下文的过渡句。更大的错误是这个开头更像是一个全文主要观点的一个分论点。

　　Revised:

　　As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family.

　　Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However,considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically,I think to live independently the earlier, the better.

　　Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.

　　解析：

　　第一句话诠释原题目意思;第二句话进一步解释第一句话;第三句话提出自己的观点;第四句话解释自己的观点，引出下文。

　　以上就是为大家整理的“托福独立写作开篇技巧”，更多精彩内容请关注新东方在线托福频道!


本文关键字: 托福写作技巧 托福写作 托福

托福辅导

关注新东方在线托福

托福机经·Official题目练习

考前重点突破·听说读写海量资料

更多资料

关注新东方在线托福，
回复【XDF】获取大礼包

托福辅导
  • 1.打开手机微信【扫一扫】，识别上方二维码；
  • 2.点击【添加】，回复对应关键字领取学习资料。
更多>>
更多内容

免费获取托福备考大礼包

微信扫描下方二维码 立即领取

托福辅导
更多>>
更多公益讲座>>
更多>>
更多资料
托福TPO 托福听力练习 托福口语练习 托福阅读练习 托福写作练习
我要
反馈 返回
首页
  • 1
  • 2
  • 3
  • 4
  • 5
  • 6
  • 7
  • 8
  • 9
  • 10