江苏省高考英语作文与托福写作的区别

　　假设赞同“排名是个人消费的有益参考”，一个托福达人的分论点可以铺陈如下：

　　第一， 网络排名有利于我买到高质量的产品或满意的服务。

　　To begin with, customer ratings provide a greater chance for me to purchase high-quality products or satisfactory service.

　　第二， 网络排名在统计意义上展现了本国当下的流行风尚。

　　More importantly, on-line ratings statistically show what are all the rage across the country.

　　假设考生赞同“排名不利于个人理智消费”，同样的角度一百八十度反转又是一篇好文。

　　第一， 网络排名充斥可疑的吹嘘和受操纵的评论，已经蜕化为商家误导个人消费的营销工具。

　　To begin with, most on-line ratings, plagued with suspicious hype and manipulated reviews, have devolved into marketing tools for sellers to mislead us.

　　第二， 在网络排名影响下，个人倾向于从众消费而失去个性。

　　More importantly, individuals tend to follow such ratings blindly while being deprived of their own free expression of their individuality.

　　我们可以和已公开的高考范文做一对照(只用读红字哦)：

　　Possible version one:

　　As a major channel of consumption information, the rating is an efficient source of information for shopping in our own consumption. Interestingly, the same rating may have different influences on different consumers.

　　I tend to consult consumption ratings whatever I purchase. Firstly, the higher rating means the higher quality of the product, or better service. Based on the ratings, I bought my beloved backpack, saw interesting films and tasted delicious foods. Secondly, ratings can save time to make decisions in shopping. For example, there are huge amounts of reference books which I am often confused to choose from. In that case, it is both convenient and economical to buy books according to the ratings.

　　There is no doubt that it is unwise to depend completely on the ratings in consumption. The advantages and disadvantages of ratings are often closely related. It is necessary to hold an objective attitude towards ratings.

　　Possible version two:

　　Nowadays, most commodities or services are rated through certain channels. These ratings, easy to access, are playing an increasingly important role in customers' purchase decision. However, results are sometimes unsatisfactory.

　　There is no denying that such ratings might bring convenience to consumers, but they are often misleading and unreliable. As we all know, most of the ratings are based on others’ judgment on the product or service concerned. Every judgment comes from a specific need or a unique psychological state. Apparently, blindly following others' advice will affect our own judgment. Another fact should not be neglected that some of the ratings are the outcome of a careful manipulation of companies or sellers. It has become a common practice for some to pay for good ratings on their products or services so as to increase their sales.

　　Therefore, we should give a second thought to these ratings whenever we go shopping.

　　两种写法是不是隐隐相似但又有点不一样呢?

　　细心的同学可能已经发现了，这四个点中，三个点和已公开的高考范文的分论点是一样的，只不过表述更抽象，以给后文留下丰富的展开空间。

　　要知道，高考范文只写两点，每点展开1-2句，全部论证形成一个100字左右的段落。

　　而托福议论文通常写两到三点，每点展开一段，每段至少100字。

　　这100字用来干什么呢?当然是写评分标准所要求的“解释、例证和细节”啦。

　　那么，高考为什么不用写例子呢?因为例子已经被出题人写掉了啦(笑)。

　　语料积累

　　在托福中有大量涉及网络利弊、消费抉择、盲从和独立的作文题目，相关范文也提供了许多地道的语料，比如：

　　Dianping 大众点评网

　　Yelp 国外的大众点评网

　　a reputable third-party review platform 一家名声好的第三方点评平台

　　marketing tactics 营销术

　　self-interested parties 利益相关方

　　free online profiles 免费在线档案

　　rated based on five measures 从一到五星评分

　　buy their way to the top of the default search results 竞价排名

　　buy endorsements with discounts or freebies 用折扣或赠品买好评

　　scrutinize 挑剔地查看

　　guard against bogus user reviews 防止刷好评

　　(嗯，真是一条负能量满满的词表呢。)

　　本文以托福眼光剖析高考英语写作，可以看到，一方面，托福的议论文写作和高考英语的书面表达话题相近，评分维度相同;另一方面，前者话题之广阔、能力要求之纵深，和后者不在同一维度。这使笔者的感受十分复杂。

　　大量本地的考试数据证实，经过合理训练拿到托福作文24+的高一、高二同学并不少见。所以笔者不禁小心翼翼地遐想，也许不是托福作文题目难，而是高考作文太过简单了呢?

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